>>90725171>could have used more muscle focusThat was mostly just me trying to get the damn thing done in one sitting before I had to do shit irl (I WAS improvising the whole thing). I'd definitely include more of that in an updated draft
>Alex going back to normal at the end was a huge buzzkillThat was mostly me not wanting to go too "super-special AU" with it... that, and it made no narrative sense to me for her to STAY buff. If I were to do a sequel, I'd definitely think of a way for her to get some refined Bulky Bars that wouldn't be TOO contrived.
