>>84352633Okay.
> Derivative, uninspired art > Way, WAAAAAY too much text ruining an already weak jokeComics are a visual medium. You should tell a joke in as few words as possible. The less text, the punchier it is. The comic is not a goddamn blog. We don't need to know "Why I hate the beach XD!" Remove that. Remove the dumb explanations of "Swimming at the beach should feel like this but all I can think about is this XD!" The octopus thing doesn't need to be giving that big flowery dumb as fuck speech explicitly explaining what it's going to do, remove that. Hell, in fact, the guy doesn't need to be sayign "Hooray sand and water!", that's retarded, and you only put that text there because you didn't do a good job SHOWING via the art that the guy is happy to be at the beach.
In fact, this would probably work better as a 3 or 4 panel comic without any words at all.
Setup: Guy working boring job or doing something he obviously likes, he gets off, is obviously overjoyed and immediately goes to the beach, last panel is simply that that creature reaching up for him. Still a weak joke, but far punchier than what you have now.
