>>113722917Yo, Anondive. Just read your story "Anon and the Author". I'm not sure how earnestly you were trying with it, but I decided to give you my thoughts nonetheless.
Your prose is really the strongest aspect of that story, but you seemed quite a bit impatient when it came to building up the type of dread that cosmic horror is suppose to have. Which is funny, because your slow-burn take is honestly what makes your erotica pretty enjoyable to read. You seemed to skip the atmosphere that a lot of horror builds throughout the story in favor of jumping all into writing how horrible and unspeakable the creature is, and how scared Anon was. But Anon had no character, so the reader couldn't feel scared with him, and the creature itself didn't really seem to embody any aspect of existential dread, at least in my opinion, it just seemed to be spooky. It reminded me kind of a Wendigo or Skinwalker actually.
Figured I'd drop you a critique.
