>>5873520ngl your Comic Page20.jpg
>>5870977 was leagues better than some of the other pages.
Particularly in the framing department with your subjects, the readability and quality of the grass, The overall color balance. I could go on but.
Get your plants in order. The foreground feels gross and clunky with the outlines only grass.
You also changed up your line quality/suggestion significantly it feels like you rushed or gave up on it on the darker bushes and translating the depth in the hill. Everything is a lot closer than the other scene in the mid/background so If you drew it a certain way before you should try and maintain it. I see the markers for some kind of structure or powerline though, so if you have plans do em, it's looks like you intend to frame the subjects.
DONT COPYPASTE YOUR SKIES.
It makes no sense and is made worse by the 90-degree perspective change from page 20 to 21. Its jarring and it's a huge continuity issue. even more so it detracts from the quality of page 20 which is great. The sky belongs in that scene, you made it for her. The light supports hope chasing the storm, from left to right. Feels.
The weather is clearly a narrative driver here so give it the respect it deserves.
Study the environment in and use the same stroke methods from page 20. Intentional or not, the grass you drew, and the gradient of colors supporting it, did a great job suggesting the shape of the ground. It really established the fore/midground/background values but did not overpower your figures. It really grounded things.
If you need more plant's and rocks or bushes you need to design a few more for that environment and simplify them in a way that you won't hate reliably making for your comic.
You will thank yourself for learning what you did right and not taking shortcuts sempai.
I love the vibe tho dont get me wrong :3 plz keep going.
