I'm happy to help.
Don't have enought ime to write too much about this one, but:
Again, you are being too inconsistent and maybe you are complicating too much.
Why are the shades on her face crosshatched, a darker tone AND outlined, while the shadows of the hair and the neck aren't? It's creating confusion and again, making it all much flatter. Also, the collar of her jacket is drawn identically to the cross-hatching on her face. This is a no-no.
I think you are using too many styles and approaches within a single image without being able to pull it off (but note that with experience, you won't even try to pull it off as you get better). You then add all these effects (wounds, facepaint, black eyes, tears) that seem a bit too shallow and forced.
I recommend you to choose a more studious approach and, based on what I criticized, try to analyze your work as much as I did while you're working at it. It gets easier, believe me.
I recommend you to take some artists you like and then try to deconstruct their work while trying to see what works and why does it work.
Does he use crosshatching? How does he do it and where? What does he leave out? How does he achieve volume? Does he, in any place, intentionally make it more flat? etc. etc.
I also recommend you to broaden your horizons by not limiting yourself to comic book art only. Knowing some art history or admiring a few artists outside your niche is essential to making progress, not only technical, but artistic (which is in contrary to what is said on /ic/, more important).
I go to a art school and it was really fun to observe what happened with certain schoolmates who were rooted in anime and cartoons and then got introduced to things like Egon Schiele, Frank Auerbach, Caravaggio etc.