>>2403860I, for one, agree with
>>2404461I've seen your stuff all over /y/ lately, and it reads like a script sorta. Some of it is pretty hot, but it gets a bit boring to read. Try changing up your writing style. Instead of :
Person1: Let me fuck ur hole
Person2: gets on knees
try more like
""A...anon" he moaned, getting close to the edge. The warm, supple tightness of the young hole swallowed his cock with ease.
"Do it" whispered Anon, "Cum inside your son""
It just reads better. I'm trying to give constructive criticism instead of just saying "kys fagot" because you have some really good ideas for stuff here, just executed in a poor way.
