>>95083080For example in page one, the colors weren't the problem, you had black, skin color, yellow, blue, red, made it easy to distinguish what's going on. As soon as your black clothes Longnose met the same area as your black dog, it got a bit confusing.
The colors on page two are absolutely perfect, it's actually very well done, but those bunch of leaves seem more precarious than they should. I can't tell if they're insanely slippery or not, 'cause in the first few pages it seems like it's raining. It almost looks like a very steep slope downwards on which she shouldn't be able to stand on.
I have nothing against page three, other than what they already told you. Lots of dead space, a rectangle would've been better than a triangle. Nothing against the page following this one. Nor the following. Nor the 6th one. These are handling it pretty well. The clusterfuck starts with the last 3 pages. Grey clothes, grey background, darker grey smoke, darker grey Lynx. I see the lynx lunging at our heroine, but due to the background the smoke the lynx's color it confused us, that's what that other guy was talking about, and how you had to explain that the character was avoiding the pounce. Even at the bottom of the page the blade of the axe disappears in the background. My only advice here is that colors don't have to be realistic, you can change your palette and the background a bit to show emotional state. Like the harbour view manga I posted done by Taniguchi, it goes from pure white to almost full black, then back again to white. I love the font by the way and the colors of the speech bubbles, they really stand out and they give a great idea where these two stand regarding "powerlevels", if you'll allow me this shitt phrase.
I can't see what the fuck is even going on in the bottom of the 8th page. Sorry. I see a hand, some armor, a bit of a lynx tail, maybe a paw. No idea in what relation to each other.
The last page has the same problem.
