>>86739982>Doing beach episode. Any other requests?First, you write well. Your dialog is excellent.
You have a few structural things in the way you're constructing sentences and paragraphs, but that comes with time and words on the page.
KEEP WRITING
GIT GUD
Also, requests:
Janna is bi and makes a pass at Jackie. A good one. So Jackie gets added to Janna's harem, but she keeps her completely secret from Marco.
Marco is topping Jeremy in a secret hatefucking thing going on after karate classes that nobody else knows about.
Janna lets slip about the Diaz to Brittney, who promptly queen-bee's him at school, to find out what the big deal is
Moon and River sexy times now that Star is outta the castle. Lotsa sweet grown-up stuff here
Janna shows up in Marco's bed one night with Starfan13, who is Down To Fuck. Star watches, of course
Janna starts bringing Starfan13 to Marco pretty regularly, and the boy Tries Stuff on her. She says yes to anything he wants to try
Star changes herself to be Starfan13 and gets laid, but Marco is used to Starfan13 as a finely honed lover and bones her so hard it scares her
That should get you started.
