>>82703663The problem is that he's not a comic book writer. He doesn't know how to make a comic book flow, which is why the narrative feels extremely stiff.
Like, his narration is definitely more eloquent and intelligently written than your standard cape fair. Compare the quality of the dialogue between this and, say, your standard Bendis comic.
The issue is that being able to write eloquently doesn't much matter if you can't structure a narrative in such a way that it isn't just sporadically jumping between scenes with very little flow.
Best case scenario, he gets the hang of it, and after a couple more issues, things feel more natural. Worst case scenario, the comic keeps having good dialogue and narration with a potentially compelling story that suffers from being ill-suited to the medium with how disjointed, stiff, and disconnected it all feels. The fact that the first arc is supposed to be 12 issues long also doesn't bode well, since that's an extreme amount of decompression right there.
