>>115392241Use Grammarly. A lot of the mistakes he makes are really basic, such as misspelling words (delecticious instead of delicious, okey dokey instead of okey-doke, etc.) and choppy and poorly paced dialogue that doesn't sound like anything a human would actually say. There's no specific part -it permeates the whole thing- but I'll give you an example. Right at the end, Wander says;
>Dominator, wait! What's your breakfast beverage of choice?!Nobody would ever ask a question like this. You'd say "What's your favorite drink?" or something.
