>>113050952Alright, then, final critique.
Probably my biggest gripe is that it transitions too quickly into Zim being pacified and Shloopbit-like. With as much attention as every other scene got, it's kind of jarring just cutting straight to that.
Grammar's also an issue throughout. I'm not about to reject the whole thing because of some grammar mistakes, but you should probably remember that for next time.
But overall, I really like it, and everything I said in the other critiques still applies. It's really refreshing to see someone writing ZAGR and actually understanding the Zim/Gaz dynamic. I hope I see you write more one day.
Thanks for writing this for me, even if it took a while.
As thanks, here's a sorta related doodle.
>inb4 the thread gets deleted or /trash/ed because of lewdposting and you never read this 
