>>105535175The characters feel like rough draft concepts, that happen to be made by someone with taste like Vi. They feel like they're putting effort in all the wrong places and also come off as one-note archetypes because like the jokes show, she doesn't want anything subtle and it has to all be clearly apparent the second you meet, or see, the characters. I get pilots are full of rough draft concepts, but nothing feels workshopped, it's like she went with the first thing she thought of.
The writing isn't subtle, it doesn't try to treat it's audience as more than 14 year old girls, and I guess that's fine since it's the demographic, but there's nothing wrong with trying to make your writing accessible for a broader rang, that's what people like about cartoons like early Spongebob, for kids but not trying to push adults out of the room. The cursing is a crutch and an unfunny attempt for laughs. We don't need to go over the sandpaper vagina line that doesn't have a flow to it either, something that happens other times.
The colors don't attempt to stay from an eye bleeding palette which is both uncreative, painful to look at, and bad for any sense of contrast to make your characters pop out more. The singing is awful, I've never liked talk-singing, they type of tunes Vivzie is picking, or the "cute character quickly turns evil and then back to cute and innocent" character type, so Charlie's song pushed me away from this pilot really bad. The most subjective of all is that the setting makes no sense from what we've heard, and that breaks the immersion since it's trying to make it a legit structure and not just gag stuff that isn't supposed to have an ounce of logic.
