Well, there is a shit ton of typos and so on, though I am not going to deal with them since I have some questions
Why do you put 'Note:What is your X?' when there is little reason to?
Dhampire seems pretty meh, since it seems like it only makes you more durable than a human and able to drink blood. Do they have anything else or just the stated? What is humanity , Ancestor and vampire(less than count rank) opinion on them? You only put the opinion of the Counts in the bestiary. How do they work with Spirits? Since their Grand blood seems like would put the spirit off.
Can you be part of the Garde Imperial? Or you can't choose having a Vampire with Count rank as your 'parent'?
Specially since you can have companions that are part of that.
What is the relationship of your Spirit Element and yours? In the bestiary it is stated that every human is born with one(and everyone was a magician before the Lunar Fall thing), but you don't actually choose one for you in the CYOA. In fact, it is stated that the Spirit can be a catalyst for your Elementalism(since most don't have the raw talent to do it alone anymore), this make it sound like they can be different(specially since Spirits can have two, but it is never stated that humans can be born with affinity to two).
Likewise, why is the Elemental Spell section in the Spirit customization if it isn't really something exclusive to your spirit(or rather, it is one of your abilities, just boosted by it)?
Speaking about Companions(haven't read everything yet, so might ask something later). Both Capet and Beatrice are the youngest?
Btw, the Spirit Ability part of Paisible is incomplete.
Is there any reason like in Echoes on why everyone has a single Ability but you have several?
This is it for now, might ask some more later.
In any case, thanks Italics