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I made a cartoon

Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 00:08:18 2018 No.3686791 View Reply Original Report

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Ok /IC/ I made a cartoon (I'm from
the comics sector but i suck dick at that too so
I figured Id give THIS a shot and whaddyu know it looks like kill myself...I've never done this before but it was a bit better in my head so i dont know how disappointed i should feel...But fucking do your worst I've already reinforced my spirit for your bullshit ...

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1-3 Month Time Limit
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1-Black Privilege(Nigga word and oppression card kinda shit you know?)

Thanks

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sywv9PeXYg0&feature=youtu.be

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Horny For Victory

Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 2018 00:23:39 No.3686804 Report

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*shameless self bump* I would actually be crushed if this just shitposted

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Nov 2018 00:26:24 No.3686808 Report

Quoted By: >>3686811

bruh that tumblery style is played out as fuck in 2018. cook up something more unique. the short itself is not bad, and there's a bit of potential like alright motion(in what little there is)

Horny For Victory

Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 2018 00:29:31 No.3686811 Report

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>>3686808
never been to tumblr but yea anime basically ruined art for sure (even i learned how to draw from weeb-dom) is there other shit it THIS style though or just generally anime like?

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Nov 2018 01:37:57 No.3686871 Report

Quoted By: >>3686888

As regarding criticism, people could be unwilling to hurt your feelings- the way you type feels very earnest. Short itself also feels hard to give criticism for, it's hard to pin down what surreal should properly be.

That being said, if you only have your voice and text-to-speech you should have more male characters. Character lines feel long winded, they're hard to follow and it is difficult to appreciate the insanity. Everyone is the same flavour of crazy. A character slaps a paper bag out of another character's hand at 3:20 and there is no sound- feel free to ignore this one but I always associate weird attention to detail with charm/quality. Going back to the topic of rambling, "I'm cheaper than your doctor." is the best line in the video- I've never heard that line before but I immediately got where they were coming from, good example of vulgar comedy.

No credentials, I watched Rejected on youtube once

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Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 2018 01:53:03 No.3686888 Report

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>>3686871 that was my favorite line as well...its the only joke in the show that wasnt technically usually write (poorly) for comics so my sense of realistic conversation is likely permanently broken (pic related) i was going for a kind of music video/short sketch kind of format (excuse me if there's actually a name for that) i felt like the lack of sound would be kind of uncomfortable but maybe youre right ... Im keeping the robots but ill probably use a Little sound next episode

Horny For Victory

Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 2018 01:54:13 No.3686890 Report

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"Technically written... I" *
i meant

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Nov 2018 01:59:30 No.3686894 Report

Quoted By: >>3686901 >>3686913

The text to speech absolutely ruins it
why in the fuck would you do that?
Just keep it mute and tell the story with the characters experssions and movements since you can't afford actual voice actors

If it didn't sound such amateurish garbage, it could easily rack up a few hundred thousand views and you'd start building a following

Horny For Victory

Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 2018 02:08:35 No.3686901 Report

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>>3686894
it is amateurish garbage anon- i only THINK MOST people would rather just hear something than to have to interpret it or read it? but for sure 90% of my peers may as well be illiterate because good luck getting the average person here to read more than a paragraph in one sitting

I was thinking the "S" sounds make my ears bleed though desu ill try and square that away by episode 2 for sure

is it just the quality or the actual lack of humanity/tone?

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Nov 2018 02:21:26 No.3686913 Report

Quoted By: >>3686927

>>3686894
I disagree, you can make stuff with text to speech but it's an impediment you have to work around
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_yzsmxugmB0
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XpV6pP7n1RI

Horny For Victory

Horny For Victory Tue 20 Nov 2018 02:44:54 No.3686927 Report

Quoted By: >>3687778

>>3686913
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_yzsmxugmB0 ow thats funny...on paper this is the stupidest shit on earth but its funnier than mine ( -_-)/__

Anonymous

Anonymous Tue 20 Nov 2018 17:22:51 No.3687778 Report

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>>3686927
Because it's concise.
It's a side thing for "If the Emperor had a Text to Speech Device", if you want to watch more.

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