Moving on: I think you're doing the opposite of what you should be doing. You have a nice image with slight value separation and you made the value separation stronger when you should be making it slighter (according to the style you're going for). I don't think that's a good image to study for shit like this anyways. Study something simpler and just focus on the style you're going for and not all this complicated neon bullshit. Maybe even have some lines if that's the style you're going for? Sorry if it sounds like I'm trying to be mean here. I'm really not. Just tired.
I've been up for 30h. I don't have time to make her look like Charleze so I just made her "Pretty lady No. 455" so I can go to bed. Instead of making more hard edges I tried to emphasize the round shapes on her face. Those anime characters tend to look pretty young so I guess it makes sense... I used soft brushes in my thing to make things go quicker but I think if I wanted to emulate the style you're going for I'd go with hard brushes with low opacity.
Tl;dr: Stop studying weird lighting setups, focus on stylization and smooth value/hue-separation.