It really says something when the only parts that aren't horribly written are the inner monologue sections lifted straight from the manga. However, the author manages to screw up even this:>You see, not only do us olders have the harder chores to do but we also have this activity that Mama tells us is good for us olders. I'll tell you about that later.^
So, I was right about Inuyasha having some degree of self-awareness. He knows there are people reading. Of course, this is because the author doesn't know how to write, and not because of anything that could possibly be interesting.
Also, this just keeps getting better and better:>After a game of Janken (1), I was IT for our daily game of tag.
Yep, this story has footnotes. I can imagine you'd also need a flowchart and a couple of spreadsheets to keep track of what's going on in here. By the way, the footnote just says that "Janken is Japanese for Rock, Paper, Scissors."
This story even has a "keikaku means plan" T/N. The level of incompetence is amazing.
What follows isn't that bad--or perhaps this story just rattled my brain--but it does manage to mix, the ^POV^ monologue, dialogue attributed to nobody, normal narration, and bits of other conversations to tell absolutely nothing even remotely interesting.>Crap! Suikotsu has a split personality! When he gets hit in the head he switches personalities! (Nicknamed Shiro and Kuro for the good and bad personalities respectfully).
Good to be respectful, amirite?
I'll admit, it's been almost a decade and a half since I last saw Inuyasha. Was this a thing? Hell, I can barely remember most of these names, do I have to keep track of this nonsense too?
Also, if the good and bad personalities have a nickname, does Suikotsu just not exist? Is it a constant back and forth between bad and good? I didn't expect a shitty crossover to present such existentialist questions, but here we are.
We also get a few lines to remind us that Renkotsu is special for being 15.