Your english is very impressive for it being your second language. If you don't mind, what is your first? Based on the way you write, I would guess Italian, but I really don't know.
As for your Japanese, I can't assess that, as I only really know situational words, but the chapter read fluidly for the most part. Thanks again for your work, and I can't wait to see more from you! This manga has got me excited, so I'm happy that someone proficient is taking it on. Are you part of a scanlation group, or do you just do solo work?